Okay, so I'd appreciate some feedback!
I'm taking a step back for a few hours because staring at this for ages isn't getting me anywhere. I feel the sand and sky are the weakest parts of this art and I can't quite get them right. Any suggestions would be fantastic!! I like the way it looks but simultaneously I don't like something about it...
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Okay - some really simple stuff to think about... your scale; is it your intention that the building on the right is so small - it's 'house-sized' - is that your plan? You've got that 'black arched door' - that reads as a hole, so not an actual entrance or a door or gateway. Also - in terms of your surfaces etc - everything here is very soft and 'made from Photoshop' - but in terms of the materiality/textures/shine/matte etc - what is distinctive about these various elements? What you need to think about is 'architecture' - actual windows/doors/detailing; yes, your artist encourages you towards these lovely soft shapes, but they're buildings/structures/fabrications too...
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More attention to detail, Ren - to cut into some of the soft, soft, soft softness :)
Yep! It is supposed to be house sized! And the door of course, I'll get on that. I'll also try some texturing on the buildings to help with materialising them?
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